- media language is a real strength - lots of technical film analysis early in the essay shows confident use of media terminology
EBI:
- English is nowhere near good enough for an A2 essay... your essay question is grammatically incorrect and fails to use capital letters. this is extremely concerning - did you proofread this at all
- the other issue with written English is paragraphing. you dont write clear topic sentences and then your paragraphs are way too short. you dont have a controlled structure for the essay
- you have a fair amount of research but it seems like much more web than academic books/ journals. you need to improve this to reach the higher levels.
- your primary and secondary text analysis midway through the essay doesn't link to any of the audience pleasures you discuss at the beginning
- too many basic errors: you say horror is more popular with women then quote a statistic that says the opposite. again, did you proofread this?
- lack of media theory... and some of the theorists you have used spelt wrong
23 = D
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